Sample Response

Both views have merit. The loss of biodiversity is a serious environmental problem because it can disrupt ecosystems and reduce the ability of the Earth to sustain human life. For example, the loss of pollinators such as bees could have a significant impact on global food production.

Besides, there are other pressing environmental problems, such as climate change, air and water pollution, and deforestation. These issues also have the potential to severely impact human well-being and the health of the planet. Climate change, for example, is one of the biggest threats to biodiversity and ecosystems. Warmer temperatures and changing precipitation patterns can cause the extinction of species, degrade habitats and alter the timing of seasonal events such as flowering and migration. To add to the mix, air and water pollution can harm both human health and biodiversity, while deforestation can lead to the loss of biodiversity, as well as contribute to climate change.

Addressing the loss of biodiversity and the other environmental problems should be a priority. This is essential to achieving sustainable development and to maintaining the ecological systems that support human well-being. This means that conservation and sustainable use of biodiversity must be integrated into all sectors. It is also important to recognize that all these issues are all interdependent. By protecting biodiversity, we can also help to mitigate the effects of climate change, improve air and water quality, and preserve the planet's natural resources.

In summary, addressing the loss of biodiversity is crucial in order to maintain the ecological systems that support human well-being. A holistic approach is needed to solving these issues.

Writing comments

The following are the reason why this task gets a Band 9 in IELTS:

Besides, and To add to the mix

Both these are interesting and novel connectors. They have also been used correctly. Such accurate, precise and flexible use of connectors can improve both you CC and LR.

The expressions in red: Could have a significant impact; pressing environmental problems; A holistic approach.

These display excellent command over language and flexibility in word use and high level vocabulary. These aspects will aid your score in LR and GR.

This is essential to achieving sustainable development and to maintaining the ecological systems that support human well-being.

An excellent complex sentence (GR) with good use of vocabulary (LR) and effective use of connecting words (CC) at the beginning of the sentence.